I hope everyone had a great weekend! I shared feedback today regarding the "leads" that students wrote for their narratives using specific strategies. I am so happy with what I am seeing..students are grabbing onto those strategies and using them! I have written feedback on all your papers, but I have not yet attached a grade (the toughest part for me). You will get them back by Wed.
Today we looked at examples of zeroing in on a writing goal, and then digging back into our narratives to revise a meaningful moment. We picked a small but powerful moment, and revised it to make sure it hinted at the deeper meaning of the story. Students looked at their written dialogue and asked if it was connected to the meaning of the story. If not, they knew they had to add inner thinking or replace/delete the dialogue. We began this practice in class.
H/W: Tomorrow, I will be checking for two examples of parts of your story that you revised to show connection to the meaning of the story. You should use examples from different stories. Be prepared to share your examples and defend how they connect to the deeper meaning of the story. This work is to be done in your composition book with the format we used today. No more writing on random pieces of paper!
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If you need review: Look below and think about how choice #2 is the better choice for dialogue follow-up. What is it showing as compared to #1? Does it tell more about the narrator and meaning of the story?
“Don't
look down, just keep climbing – you're almost at the top,” Peter
urged. I swallowed and snuck one quick look.
1)My
sister, Mary, was standing at the bottom of the tree, holding my dark
blue sandals and looking up at me as she shielded her eyes at the
sun. (What does this SHOW? Mary)
2)The
tree swayed slightly as I tightened my grasp on the trunk. A rough
piece of bark dug sharply into my arm, but I didn't dare move.
(What does this SHOW? I am alone and frightened)
Enjoy your evening!
